Inside the forests, I wandered
With wild animals
Hungary for food and life
They tried to suck my blood
And tear me down
I walked and walked
And sometimes I ran too
The mind was baffled
The body was tired
Life was aimless
My actions were pointless
I thought about the purpose of life
The reason for the wind flow
The falling of the rains
The azure sky
And then I met the flowing river
And I sat beside it
Looked at its water
In the night when the animals slept
I walked fearlessly in the forest
And when they woke up
They tried to kill me
And suddenly I saw
Water rushing
All the animals in the forest were drowning
And I was sitting on a tree
Watching the river.
I like the feel of the poem, the sea, winds, animals, rains, sky, so many elements of nature. It’s beautiful! 💙
Also, the ending is a bit confusing. I get the feeling of some supernatural movie, like you are somehow able to control the flow of river! Like you are so connected to the nature that it works at your wish. 🤔 Or maybe you’re the son of Poseidon, the God of Sea. I read this in Percy Jackson. 😛 Am I guessing the right direction? Do let me know what was the actual thought behind this.
-Firefly 🐝
Hi chandni…thank you for taking your time to read..I loved your interpretation. I wrote it on love. The wild animals here are people who at every stage of life criticize us. The river is the true love. True love here means the love which pushes you towards finding the purpose of your life. The man finds his purpose with the river. And the river with its unconditional love protects the man from the egregious world.
OMG! That’s the deepest thing I have ever read. 😻 I am spellbound. This is soooo beautiful, Shreyans. How can you write like this? I really want to ask you one thing here. Did you imagine the scene first and then assigned a meaning to all the symbols? Or did you establish the whole moral of the story first and then designed a story around it? 😄 Either way, it’s the most beautiful thing, seriously.
Hiii chandni…You have made my day by your appreciation..I am really glad that you enjoyed..I get inspired by emotions..in this one i wanted to write about love..which i feel should be..and i thought about the obstacles that come in one’s path to love…generally its people…and then i used them as wild animals…the wandering of the man is his life…love is his purpose..and the river is his love..which saves him from the egregious world..showing the power of true love….
thank you so much dear….for giving your time to read..I hope you understood what you were asking..And i hope i did justice to this…thanks again..keep writing
Haha, nai, you made my day by such a beautiful and intense poem. 🌼 Wow, yes, I understood now. Thoughts first and then the story, so you need to have one clear idea about what you want to convey and then you create a story. That’s very interesting. ☺
Haha, no thankyou for time. It’s for my own profit. The more I’ll read, the more I’ll be able to have ideas to write, hehe. 😹 So, I am doing myself a big favour when I read your works. 🌼 You wrote veryy well, please write more such things that challenge me. 😛
-Firefly 🐝
Thank you Chandni…For being so kind..For a writer this is everything..The appreciation for his work..You motivated me to write more stuff..Thank you..Keep writing..Keep shining..Have a great day ahead..
Yayy! You keep shining too. And have a beautiful day ahead, so that you can write beautiful poems out of your experiences. 🌼
Thank you chandni…
So all those who tried to intimidate you and scare you will surely get it back.
The built of the poem was really well!
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thank you pramegha…glad you liked
shreyans
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